i am actually planning on whoring that stock for a while... thnx
anyway this looks ok. i can see your trying to expirment with brushes and C4Ds .. being honest its really not a bad attempt at that style

.. but try to cut back on the (default) layer effects. i mean if you are going to use them? then remember to always take your time & tweek each layer effect individually to suit the light and depth.. or just dont use them at all.. as they tend to make tags look n00bish and unblended if not executed properly.
all in all id say 6/10 kiu.. work on the blending, lighting and depth next time.. also avoid the floating head syndrome